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　　The Robot Is a Machine after All

　　The robots are more and more clever ,thus they can do many things as well as people ,even better than us. However  the robot is a machine after all.

　　For example , the robot can compete with people in playing card  and chess. The robot is so clever that people can’t win it at first. When people open the robot’s body and regulate it’s program to reduce its intelligence.,then the same competion is proceeding ,the robot will lose the game.

　　From  above example , we can include  that  the robots are  machines after all ,they are produced  by people , controlled  by people.  So if we  utility  them  by  suitable  means  ,they  can  do  many  things  instead  of  human beings,  thus  people  can  release  from  the  dagouruos  and  harmful  works.

　　点评：6—8分

　　文章的结构不太合理，第一段应该说明漫画的内容，提出题目中的观点，第二段就是分析原因，找论据证明题目的观点，第三段总结就可以。你现在的结构需要调整。另外注意句子之间的衔接，拼写错误以及词性问题。加油啊。