同等学力英语作文批改：第117期

　　同等学力英语作文原文

　　The Robot Is a Machine After All

　　Mr. Black is an engineer,and Robot is his intellectual machine .One day, Mr. Black played cards with Robot.At first, Robot played very well. He won a lot of money of Mr. Black’s. He looked very happy.

　　Owing to losing money, Mr. Black felt very upset.“Don’t I must be defeated by a machine?” Mr. Black began to think.Suddenly,he had a good idea. Mr. Black opened Robot’s chest and began to oprate. A few minetes later, Mr. Black stopped operate.

　　Now  Mr. Black played cards with Robot again. This time the consequence turned over. An increasing number of money was won by Mr. Black. Mr. Black began to smile,and Robot looked vety sad.“Ah, The robot is a machine after all!” Mr. Black thought.“The world is controled by mankind  still.A lot of study work must be done to develop Robot.”

　　点评：6—8分

　　整篇文章都是在讲漫画的故事，而没有论据证明题目的观点，这样不行。段就应该说明漫画的内容，提出题目的观点；第二段就是分析原因，找出论据证明论点。第三段总结。注意文章中的语法错误和拼写错误。加油啊。