同等学力英语作文批改：第二期

　　同等学力英语作文原文：

　　My View on Reform of Medical care in China

　　There is no denying the fact that medical expenses and difficult threatment is a grave problem with which our country are confronted in the present situation. Complaints are often heard from the people aroud us that they couldn’t pay for the medical cost. They are hard to have an appointment with a doctor in large hospital, because the doctor’s appointment is arranged fully. Acually, the problem has become so widepread that it has severely affected people’s live.

　　A number of factors account for the problem, but the leading reason might be inadequate medical care system and poor medical care environment. The hospital is a profit structure. They must try their best to earning the money to maintain the operation of hospitals. The absence of reasonable charges for medical care system will result in increasing cost. On the other hand, people flock to large hospital because of the lack of medical resources.

　　In view of the seriousness of this problem, effective measures must be taken before things get worse. First, it is essential that laws and regulaiongs be worked out and enforced to bind the doctor’s medical behavior. Secondly, the relevant government departments should allocate medical resources appropriately. With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that the problem will be soleved in the near future.

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　　该文内容基本符合写作要求，论述比较充分、详实；但是语言错误较多，有较多的单词拼写错误，表达错误，名词单复数等问题。

　　建议在今后的学习中，多从英语基本功抓起，熟练正握基本语法知识，并且多言研习英文美文，学习其中的语言表达，以积累写作素材。