同等学力英语作文批改：第一期

　　同等学力英语考试主观题一直都是在职考生的拦路虎，如何把英语作文写好，成为摆在考生们面前的最大障碍。为此同等学历考试辅导老师，为准备参加考试的考生批改作文。现将其中部分批改内容提供给广大同等学力考生参考。

　　同等学力英语作文原文：

　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China.

　　Nobody can have failed to notice the fact that medical treatment have been a grave problem with which we can confronted. Taking a look around, we can find example too numberous to list: when we go to hospital, the time of waiting to face a doctor is longer than before; the cost of the medicine is more expensive than before.

　　A number of factors account for the problem, but the follwing are the most critical ones .In the first place, the number of people notice their healthy than before ,so they go to hospital more than before. The second place, the medical reform is not successful in hospital, doctors are  not enough .The last place, some new medicines for fever and cough are more expensive than before ,At the same time, the cheaper medicines are not be production .

　　How to solve the problem in the medical treatment? Firsr of all, people should realize that they can keep their own healty by some good habits, Second, the government should increace the money in the hospital, develop the quantity and quality of the doctors. Thirdly, the reform of medicine price should carry out in the hospital.

　　老师评语：

　　得分6-8分

　　该文基本符合写作要求，较完整的表述了医疗现状，问题原因以及医疗改革的建议。

　　但是，语言错误较多，内容不是很充实。建议在今后的英语学习中，从英语基本功抓起，尽量避免出现过多的语法错误。