托福写作中应该避免的病句

    想在新托福考试上拿到理想分数，避免写出病句绝对是很关键的一步。下面是新托福考试写作中考生常出现的20个病句修改，或许能对大家的写作水平提高带来帮助。

    1. The artists work pushes our civilization to a higher level.

    改进：Artists work upgrades our civilization.

    2. For example， you work in a big factory.

    改进： Suppose you work in a big factory.

    3. Youll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.

    改进：Youll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.

    4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.

    改进： We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.

    5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.

    改进： He will get a higher salary， thus improving his life.

    6. Their brain is still very young.

    改进： They are still immature.

    7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.

    改进：Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.

    8. They cant analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.

    改进： They cannot tell right from wrong.

    9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.

    改进： It will help children learn to make good use of time.

    10. Though it is not the best job， it afford to his life.

    改进： Though it is not the best job， a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.

    11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation， they want further development.

    改进： Since people are never satisfied with their status quo， they want further development.

    12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.

    改进： The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.

    13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.

    改进： They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.

    14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.

    改进： Some cigarettes may cost even more.

    15. Firstly， dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.

    改进： Firstly， dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products.

    16. Insgroupsto suit the needs of enteringsintoswork， students must grasp some technical skills.

    改进： Insgroupsto meet the needs of future work， students must learn some practical skills.

    17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.

    改进： Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.

    18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.

    改进： This knowledge will become part of you.

    19. They cannot think clearly.

    改进： They cannot think straight.

    20. Money can improve their living standard.

    改进： Money can improve their life.

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