同等学力英语作文批改：第30期

　　同等学力英语作文原文：

　　Do “Lucky Numbers” Really Bring Good Luck?

　　In reality, some people think that some numbers are lucky numbers which can bring good luck. Some people even spend more money to buy certainly numbers for their car, photo mobile. Another yet draw lucky numbers on their faces, arms, necks and feet. Some one do things first seek lucky numbers. Especially in poor and remote country, people do every thing to rely on their lucky numbers. As a modern young man, I think that there is absurd.

　　I think that good luck needs industrious and intelligence. There are many opportunities in continual exploring and studying. Successful men and women don’t depend on lucky numbers but successive efforts. For example, Newton invented the law of gravity. Who knows his lucky numbers? With lucky numbers car, I don’t think that it really can avoid all disasters. In a word, numbers are not related with good luck, and success relies on industrious and intelligence.

　　名师点评：9分

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