同等学力英语作文批改：第28期

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　　Do “Lucky Numbers” Really Bring Good Luck?

　　There is no denying the fact that many people believe numbers are related to luck. Taking a look around, we can find the examples too numerous to list. In many Chinese’s opinion, 8 can take people fortune. As a result, so many people pay much more money to get their mobile phone number or car plate number with 8. On the other hand, some numbers believed to bring people bad luck are avoided in daily life such as 4 and 13.

　　Personally, I claim that numbers are not related to luck. Taking 8 as a example, many people believe it can bring us fortune. If we doesn’t work hard to make more money, fortune can not come to us itself, even though our mobile phone numbers are 88888888. By contrast, 4, believed as dying in Chinese, can’t also make us die.
 
　　To sum up, numbers are only numbers which are playing important role in many fields in our daily life. In my opinion, new awareness should be enhanced and guided for people to leave the old belief in which lucky numbers bring good luck behind.

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