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　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China

　　There is no denying the fact that medical care is a serious problem with which we are confronted in China. In the first place,it is tough to see the doctor when the people have been sick especially in the countryside which has nothing medical condition. In the second place, the medical fare is expensive for the normal citizens. Taking a look around, we are often heard that someone is so poor that no money to undertake the spending and die from the disease finally.

　　An increasing number of reasons account for the problem ,but the leading reason might be the nation’s investment and supervision .Actually, the medical care is reforming, but the shorted medical funds leads to the reform not profound and widespead. Though, the government of China attachs importance to medial care,a series of effective measure isn’t worked out enough well in local government .

　　In my opinion, it is essential that medical care must be reformed far-reching before it becomes serious problem of the society. On the one hand, laws should be made to take care all the Chinese people and carried out various aspects .On the other hand ,the government should improve the insurance of medical care. Last but not least,the people should enhance their awareness of healty.With these measure taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that the problem will be solved in the near future.

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