同等学力英语作文批改：第16期

　　同等学力英语作文原文：

　　I set myself against feeding pets

　　Recent years, with people living standard improvement, many bring up pets more and more. Pet market gets very hot. Many kind of small animal are lovely very much. However, yet someone don’t like these animal. There are several main opinions about feeding pets. One hand, supporters think that pets can bring many pleasant for people; another hand, opposed people think that feeding pets can cause many trouble, even unpredicted hurt. As a young man, I support the later.
 
　　There are some reasons for supporting my opinions. First, feeding pets need taking many time, but now I haven’t, because I am very busy every day. Second, for feeding pets there are some unpleasant smell in our house, and animal’s hair scatter all around, I don’t tolerant it. Third, some pets usually take many harmful bacteria, they can affect children and elder’s health.
 
　　With these disadvantage, t set myself against feeding pets.

　　名师点评：10分。

　　同学你好，你的结构安排比较合理，只是在第二段论证自己观点时要找有说服力的论据，不要拿自己说事，因为你个人只是个特例。

　　比如：你说养宠物需要花很多时间，你完全可以说帮宠物洗澡，会让人分心等等。

　　注意一些表达方式的正确运用和语法问题。

　　加油！