同等学力英语作文批改：第10期

　　同等学力英语作文原文：

　　My view on Reform of Medical Care in China 

　　At present ,China  there is a high medical expenses and medical care difficult problem.We often hear that a family because of a sick family member in need of assistance not afford to buy  drugs and to see a doctor.

　　The first reason for these problems is majorier of the chinese people have no medical  insurance. Some malignant diseases or long—term chromic diease,medical costs are fully borne by households often leaves the family impoverished by hospitalization. The second reason is that the proportion of people to doctor is too low.

　　In our opinion, the fundamental measure is to allow everyone health insurance. In this  way ,those  who suffer from the malignant dieases and patients with long–term chronic dieases will greatlly reduce the burden on the family. Then we should add the mumber of hospital and doctor. the last one is that different disease will go to different  hospital  .A minor defect  should go to a community hospital, while the difficult cases go to high–level hospital.

　　老师评语：得分6-8分

　　该文基本上可以表述清楚写作意图，段落结构比较清晰明了，可以较正确的使用基本句型。

　　缺点是：

　　1. 语言基本功不扎实，稍微复杂一点的表达就会出现错误。需要温习一下句法。

　　2. 单词拼写错误太多，连续的错误表明你确实不会写那个单词，而不是笔误，那就要加强单词背诵的工作。

　　3. 中式思维，基本上都是按照中文意思直接翻译成英文。需要训练英文思维习惯。

　　尽管问题很多，只要坚持练习，还是会有所突破！再接再厉！