同等学力英语作文批改：第8期

　　同等学力英语作文原文：

　　My View on Reform of Medical Care in China

　　The execution of health care reform was not successful in our country since the 90s of the 20th century, and many problems of medical care emerged in recent years. For example, people complained that it is difficult to see the doctor and the medical expense is too high. Some peasants or the poor who be ill had to choose death.

　　The cause of these problems is complex. Firstly, the resourse of health are concentrated to big city, the doctors and medicine at countryside and grass-roots unit are shortage. Secondly, in order to reduce the burdens of the country, the hospital has been marketed. Thirdly, the sale links of medicine are too complicated, which lead to the price of the medicine increasing.

　　How to resolve these problems effectively? On the one hand, the government must increase the inputs in the health medical care, and the hospital must return the public benefit. On the other hand, we should try hard to increase the income of the resident, especial of the peasant. Finally, we should make medical insurance covering the entire population of our country.

　　老师评语：5-8分

　　该文开篇有跑题的嫌疑。但是基于后面的论述中基本符合文意，就暂定为符合写作要求的档次。

　　但是，该文的语言使用比较生涩，有较多的动词用法滥用，固定搭配中介词的误用等。

　　建议在今后的学习中，加强英语语法基本功的学习，并且多加研习英文美文，积累写作的各种素材。