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　　My View On Reform of Medical Care in China
 
　　At present, the reform of medical care in China exists many problems. For example, the common people need to pay more money for medical care and wait for much time to see a doctor. Their incomes are too little to pay prices of medical care. Sometimes, they must spend much time to queue up the doctors because the hospitals have always so many persons.
 
　　What causes these results? On the one hand, the medical care system in China is not whole. On the other hand, the amount of the hospitals and doctors is not too much.
 
　　How to solve the problems of the reform of medical care? Personally, first of all, the government must reform the medical care in China that everyone can see a doctor. Secondly, the government must increase expenditure in the medical care to decrease burdens of the common people. Thirdly, to increase the number of hospitals and doctors.

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