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　　"IN OUR TIME ,SPECIALISTS OF ALL KINDS ARE HIGHLY OVER-RATED. WE NEED MORE GENERALISTS_PEOPLE WHO CAN PROVIDE BROAD PERSPECTIVES."

　　下面是ETS BENCHMARK 5和READER COMMENT中的认为有错的部分句子

　　1、原句：WHEN A SICKNESS PROGRESSES OR BECOMES DIAGNOSED AS A DISEASE THAT REQUIRES MORE CARE THAN A FAMILY DOCTOR CAN PROCIDE ,HE MAY BE REFERRED TO A SPECIALIST.

　　ETS COMMENT: THE LACK OF A PRONOUN REFERENT

　　我的修改：这一句本人不懂，恳请指教。不知道代词缺在哪里？

　　2、原句：SOMEONE WHO KNOWS HOW IIT BEGINS ,PROGRESSES,AND SPECIFIED TREATMENTS.

　　ETS COMMENT：AN ERROR IN PARREL STRUCTURE

　　我的修改：SOMEONE WHO KNOWS HOW IT BEGINS ,PROGRESSES ,ANG GETS SPECIFIED TREATMENTS.

　　3、原句：GENERALIZED TEACHERS ARE REQUIRED TO BEGIN MOLDING STUDENTS AT A VERY EARLY AGE SO THEY CAN GET READY FOR THE FUTURE AHEAD OF THEM IN GAINING MORE FACTS ABOUT THE BASIC SUBJECTS AND FINDING OUT NEW FACTS ON THE OLD ONES.

　　ETS COMMENT:LOOSE SYNTAX AND IMPRECISE LANGUAGE

　　我的修改：GENERALIZED TEACHERS ARE REQUIRED TO BEGIN MOLDING STUDENTS AT A VERY EARLY AGE AND INDUCT THEMSINTOSMORE FACTS ABOUT THE BASIC SUBJECTS, BASED ON WHICH,THE STUDENTS CAN FIND OUT NEW FACTS AND GET READY FOR THE FUTURE BEFORE THEM .

　　我想我们要得高分，首先得分析ETS的范文极其点评，看看ETS的观点是什么，在乎什么。大家对上面的分析有什么看法，或者对ETS的范文有更多的分析，欢迎发表意见。谢谢！(作者:凌云飞雪)